tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-633635046879671816.post7709566583660159171..comments2012-10-15T15:02:58.295-07:00Comments on Taylor and Grammar Collide: Blog 6taylor_armstronghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14594184837821647859noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-633635046879671816.post-87582611534805416692012-10-09T11:56:16.636-07:002012-10-09T11:56:16.636-07:00You definitely gave me a visual image in the back ...You definitely gave me a visual image in the back of my mind, from the old run down car to the man who can't resist his urge. My favorite part is the repetition you used "Pounding, pounding, pounding in his ears as he reaches for the cool metallic handle." I found this to be a strong use of participles.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17764928431289562496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-633635046879671816.post-68874292010354176102012-10-08T15:43:58.266-07:002012-10-08T15:43:58.266-07:00yeah, fun read, Taylor. You only need to review ap...yeah, fun read, Taylor. You only need to review appositives; the rest, good to go!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00257940218680612340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-633635046879671816.post-87974074809075558462012-10-08T13:32:11.315-07:002012-10-08T13:32:11.315-07:00 I like the parallelism you incorporate into your ... I like the parallelism you incorporate into your writing while also using the other patterns for the week. The color idea was great! It made it easy to follow and pointed out the different patterns. I wish I had thought of that. <br />I really liked your adjectives out of order. Nice description of the car. You made such a simple, little story about an old car and its owner very interesting and even intriguing to read. <br />Great use of absolutes in your last sentence especially. <br />Chelsea Brannockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03348259167491282560noreply@blogger.com